we now trampled down
a road less travelled
physical embrace
has slipped in
where emotions dwell
and we understand
yes,
we understand
the frozen fears
behind the touch
the countless caricatures
and the technicolor pages
of our walk
but
the trust of seeing
of feeling
of revealing
of soaping
of running through the rain
for the first time
and that
togetherness
in prayer
is the trust much-needed
to elude
the frozen fears
of this road
less travelled..
.
.
.
nice one,
thank you for the feedback and participation to the community of poets.
you know something jingle, most of your comments was directed to spam including this..i just checked and saw four of yours inside..
a fluent poem, good use of words that sound a like.
well done.
your comments are much appreciated wordwand..
the most curious poet award,
have fun!
thks jingle..
I love this poem! It’s very deep and describes the emotions well. Thank you for such an insightful poem.
thank you anna..
Very well written! Loved your imagery n word flow.. you seem to say so much with very few words..
Hugs xox
thanks oilvia..
That’s one with a slower beat than usual, Fiveloaf. Very effective, I like it!
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/03/24/first-kiss/
hey thanks jessi..
another fantastic poem! 🙂
another? oops haha!
it’s beautiful
thanks luna..
What a beautiful poem!
thanks mbk..
Beautiful….and wonderfully expressed!
tq eugenicist..
I really like the blake-referation in line 2, but otherwise its very beautiful as well 😀
tq haggis..
frozen fears and the road less travelled, you took us uopn a difrent journey here…thanks for sharing..
my link: http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2010/10/link-to-cape-town-httpwwwcitysightseein.html
tq chimnese..
Wonderful structure- like a road? Really nice flow. Made me think. 🙂
tq james..
I’d put those frozen fears close to icicle anxiety! Very Nice write.
thanks boo..
Wishing you the support you deserve. A lovely write.
thanks mair..
thought provoking, sensitive, truly beautiful. Fear is the enemy of us all. When we work past our fears, we are unstopable. thanks you for sharing this poem. Hugs, pat
thanks pat..
To chose the road less travelled and to leave our mark there… pure bliss.
thanks reflections..
“togetherness
in prayer
is the trust much-needed”
Inspiring words…an excellent poem.
tq david..
We usually fear a road less travelled… You just told it beautifully!
tq seabell..
woww.. well said, Kris! Trust – much needed on those roads less traveled, and so hard to come by…
thanks kavi
apt sentiments,
well done.
A++
😉
tq ji
Such beautifully visual words. Wonderfully felt and written.
thanks teri
profound.. very well written…
thanks twenties..
It is beautiful.. A sense of lonely flow in it, at least that’s how it made me feel.. 🙂
thanks krislin..
I don’t understand the soaping.
no need to haha! thanks joyce..
Good one 🙂 made me wander off…
you did? to sleep? that bad huh! lol..
no lol my imagination was taken away…
haha!
I like it. It is very unique — Artistic and beautiful. Good work.
thanks koatmeal..
This is such a sweet piece. Yes- trust is key to overcome uncertainty. You’ve expressed that very well in this piece. I like the fact that it’s the body language that’s speaking and it is understood and trust becomes evident. Very nicely done indeed!
thanks tekia
This is beautiful…it is hard to let go of fears when they are real but yes trust can pave the way.
thank you rekha
loved…
“togetherness
in prayer
is the trust much-needed
to elude
the frozen fears
of this road
less travelled..”
tq papo
I really like this poem. You keep it simple without sacrificing any meaning.
tq chris
You have an amazing talent to instill the most complex of emotions into the simplest of structures to create magnificent art – great write!
woooooooooooo ab! haha thanks! 🙂
Nice job, Kris. Evocation in its simplicity.
Thanks for visiting us and commenting today on “Into the Bardo,” a blog I am doing in concert with my friends Rob and Ann. Much appreciated.
JamieDedes
a triolet haha ok i see! thanks for coming by all three of you..
Whoops! That should say “evocative” in its simplicity. Sorry. Elder brain!!! LOL!
Have a wonderful day, my dear.
thanks explorations in sacred space
I love this. It has a dreamy mystical feel.
thanks tiger..
Nice write, Like the emphasis on emotion attributed to now being lost…
tq jagring and welcome to my poetry blog..
Lately, I have been very interested in the mind-body connection. Mainly because western civilization is so far off the mark! I think you have given us a wonderful reminder to trust the body’s experience in these lines:
the trust of seeing
of feeling
of revealing
of soaping
of running through the rain
for the first time
Sometimes our bodies are much smarter than our brains!
thanks cloaked..
That’s the best poem I’ve read yet.
I’ve decided to get an email subscription to your blog. I get so side-tracked sometimes. I always love your poems!
love your honesty lisa
The trust of LIVING is what works on the road less travelled…loved this one:)
tq raksha..
This was profound. Well done.
JP
tq jp..
Thanks for visiting my blog
welcome latha
Very nice.
thanks liz..
it’s a beautiful smooth flow … wonderful…
thanks baishali..
beautiful and emotional poem.
tq lola..
Ooohh…. the joys and pleasures of romance – especially new romance – far outweigh the worries and the fears. My favorite part…soaping!
soaping aha! lol..
🙂 You did it again…thanks for sharing!
did it again? thanks soulicitor
Nice one. Excellent sentiments beautifully expressed.
thanks the fool?
There is a lot to ponder in this one, fiveloaf. You are a talented and thoughtful poet.
thanks liv
Good stuff. Particularly liked, ‘of soaping’. Nice poem.
soaping? haha thanks dunstan
Brilliant…!
lol..
This took me somewhere. I like
“of soaping
of running through the rain”
thanks irene..
Better than good, it’s inspiring.
thank you david..
trust is really essential for any true relationship. absolutely essential.
thanks trish
I wish it was as easy for our frozen fears to melt as effortlessly ice melts:-)
Lovely poem and thanks for stopping by!
thanks sau..
Thanks for visiting my blog 🙂 a very thoughtful poem…sometimes fear, if channelled properly, can really help to deal with a situation…just a thought.
welcome meghna
The first step is always the most intimidating. We tremble, within our own insecurity, wondering if we’ll enjoy the adventure. -kay salady
I enjoyed your poem very much. Thank you!
tq kay..
wonderful expressions.. Thank you for visiting my blog 🙂
thanks priyanka
Trust is the key! Despite all our great education and knowledge, in the end, we need the prayers and trust to embark on the road less traveled.
yea jaan
I so feel the loss of that trust !
So much yearning in these lines ..
yes lady
“togetherness
in prayer
is the trust much-needed
to elude
the frozen fears
of this road
less travelled..” this has so much meaning in it….Nice!
yes uma..
five, I love this. Thank you for leaving the link for me. Definitely one of my favorites this week.
-Ms. Queenly
thanks queen..
Very nice, I enjoyed this
thanks testing..
beautiful poem fiveloaf..
Someone is Special
thanks sis..