I love you but then
I don’t know when
I need to relent
so you could bend
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so you could bend
I need to relent
I don’t know when
I love you but then..
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fiveloaf 
Fiveloaf:
This is an interesting paradox — the dance of lovers, that is why I love the Tango, —-
Romantic and profound, a truly lovely poem.
Cheers,
joanny
thank you joanny..
This is cool.
i like the kind of mirror image verse structure
thank you severny and where have you been all this while haha! still perfecting your performing poems? those are great!
perfect rhyme,
awesome love,
u truly are rising above.
keep shining.
thank you ji and finally you got what i meant haha! thank you for your comments..
Very interesting form of repetition, really liked the effect it had on the meaning. Great work!
thanks deadpoet88!
Your creativity shines with the mirror image of words that hold two different hearts. Greatly done.
thank you splash..
Lovely!
thanks punam.. and welcome to my little poet corner..
good line play here. good write
thank you woih.. welcome to my humble blog..
The symmetric structure of this is beautiful!! Excellent piece!
thank you mstevenson.. really appreciate your comment and visiting my blog..
the balance…. ahh, so difficult to find sometimes…
haha yea- thats life..
great last line, i must say 🙂
c’est la vie 😀
thanks glitter..
cool form!
tq auntiequary..
love the rhythm here
thanks kathe..
this is a superb piece…
nice rhyme…and repeating everything in reverse way fits perfectly too…. 🙂
thank you sumit… 🙂
La Ronde…and so it goes..ah, love!! Well done…
thank you lyn..
Your expression makes me think of times I should have relented a little my self. But I don’t think that that could have ever been really me if I had. Cheers man! Have a smile on me! 🙂
you got a good point 2z– false persona is only good for awhile..
Lovely form – circular
thanks marousia..
Kris,
I like how you have been shuffling your words and thoughts around.
Very clever Kris……
Eileen 🙂
thank you for your support eileen..
Hi! I’m really abd with wordpress but I’m so glad with your post, especially this one. I really like this poem. Kudos!
Thank you for liking my poem too…
welcome kumi and thank you for coming by..
your writing is so much fun,
delicious and moving…
thank you filling.. 🙂
Beautifully done
thanks nima and welcome to my blog- feel free to browse anytime.. 🙂
like the best of writes, deceptively simple, ebbing and flowing, reflecting and right …beautifully done
thank you brian..
To know how far to go and when to hold still or push harder is the secret of life. Simply and precisely stated in your poem.
thank you judy..
Short and strong!
thank you ina..
Aahh.. this vicious circle!! One never really knows how and where it began… but it just goes on and on.. no ?
Nicely done, fiveloaf! Very stylish and original!
tq kavita
I like the order of this poem
tq angela..
and it goes on and on.. 🙂
🙂
thanks olivia- as long as time permits..
To be or not to be .. a very good style for poetry, especially when not to be is to be.
haha ijm- you can literally see thru my poems and therefore my soul..
Yes, I like the whole mood the repetition gives. Maybe I’ll try something along that line.
Victoria
inform me when you have written it so that i can review yours too!
saying i love you is easy, the real job starts after that.
🙂 yea trish.. thanks!
so different.. but very nice.. its the first time i have seen such kind.. 🙂
please check my blog and provide me with your kind inputs and suggestions
Many Thanks in Advance,
Delphine
thanks delphine..
Thank you fiveloaf for checking my blog out and for your kind words.. I will definitely take your advice and proceed forward.. 🙂
Thanks once again.
no problem delphine..