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fiveloaf 
empty.
huh? kakakakakaka!!
Haha fun!
http://www.denwrites.com
tq dennis.. intended to be..
Yea yea yea it’s you. 😉
haha! tq aminul..
Extremely interesting, and at the same time feels like a subliminal message underneath. Excellent creation intertwined with art. 🙂
you read it well..
My statement in my Art Portfolio is:
“Dots and lines in the right place is art” ~ Jeques
For your work, Letters in the right place is poetry. The title and the proper placement of letters form the complete thoughts that spoke loud and clear your story.
Thanks for visiting my webnook.
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
very experienced opinion- thank you for dropping by jeques and feel free to browse anytime..
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/06/22/the-celebrate-poet-of-may-award-and-more/
one poetry award,
plus 3 general,
see details on your own…
😉
funny!
haha funny? nvm… thanks ji!
a writer who can write outside the box and leave a space that tells its own unique story…once again amazing..simply amazing!
thanks buddy for your continuous support..
Well that looks like not only ME before US but a LOT OF ME before 1 US.
haha! i enjoy all these conclusions that comes to the readers mind… thanks datsme!
ha ha! inspirational!
tq sonu!
lovely.
tq trish..
putting “me” before “us” is normal human behaviour, those who dont are gems.
in a way you may be right trish
This is funny 😀 xx
🙂 haha!
huhu haha tq chloe
Ha! That was super funny! I wonder why did you choose that shape for you before you/us/ 🙂 I like your creativity very much Kris!
thanks blaga
eh?! hehe it was interesting
thanks paulami
careful of framing yourself up!lol 🙂
haha what? lol..
amazing! me before us! i love the message. just like how a baker first tastes the bread to make sure it tastes good and it is a delightful bread before serving it. nice one fiveloaf!
thanks julian
🙂 Five you’re amazing…:-)
thanks sam
confuse lol……but the shape presents it right..
haha confused? ok…
Amazing way to put it, fiveloaf!
thanks seabell
Admire your guts .Wish i could break free from rhymes and post something of this sort in my corner too!
thanks butterflies- it dont need guts- it needs more imagination than guts haha~ this is called wordplay, a form of art and a form of poem too!
Great message…..
Me is always before us……me is simply vanity or ego orwhatever you call but always it comes before us….
A beautiful poem with 3 words……
thanks rashmi
deep and artful. not much of a shape poet myself, but I do admire yours, Kris!
My Post Is Here
tq vinay..
Terrific!
thank you kim
Bowing once again to your creative genius!
Artful-sublime-humorous-deep – how do you do it? Novice poets want to know. Strike that. Novice poets need to know!
you flatter me. i am a novice myself. i guess it has alot to do with my background and concept to me is as important as the written words. shape poems can reveal alot if one really studies the title in relation to the content or the lack of it in relation to the shape. the shape itself can reveal alot about the hidden meanings much of what the poet is trying to convey. try it yourself haha!
admire your patience.
wow.
lovely creation, carry pride.
🙂
thanks ji
Very clever and inventive…you got you point across!
thanks honey
Memememe! Haha. Fun write!
ya haha
Very clever. I like it alot. A box, a form to settle ‘other’ and ‘me’into. When, below you are on a string.. all alone
nice one. thanks.
thanks geezer..
Yep, you did great, looks like you enjoyed, happy to hear.
thanks john..
Brilliant
thanks kodjoo..
Hey fiveloaf, is there a reason for the square shape? This is the first time I have encountered your delivery style and I thought it might be interesting to get to know your inspiration for this piece and I would also like to know about the message behind it…
It’s slightly abstract to me – similar to artwork and I am not too good with interpretation so it would be great if you could share your thoughts 🙂
Thanks!
maybe you’d like to refer to my reply on mcgees comment? thanks clariice..
very creative! 🙂
tq dsnake1
that is very nice.. some artwork:)
thanks sajeev
Original and very creative.
tq k2king
wow…so deep…
soooo deep!
Bliss ~
tq sina..
Wow! Just Wow! I never expected this. It is beautiful!
thanks kittz
It’s really interesting. It’s almost hypnotic.
Nice job, fiveloaf.
tq thingy
So much in so little. Nicely expressed.
(Thanks for dropping in)
tq andy
Youyouyouyou 🙂 I am lost for words here 😛
haha ina!
lol…
huh swanrose? haha thanks!
Almost sad that the empty box is so large before the “Us”
But then again, it also looks like a lollypop.
🙂
thanks peggy
booguloo says..”big mouth, shallow existence”.. Well thought out with a great presentation.
haha thanks booguloo whatever your intepretation is
It looks like a big mouth shouting me.. Now at a second look it could be also a mirror frame..
haha thanks booguloo
brilliant. and thanks for letting me see this!
thanks am
haha.. nice artwork 🙂
tq robin
This reminds me of a meditation yantra focused in shape to trigger a state of mind. Interesting work ~Rose
tq c rose
Nice 🙂
Blessed Be )o(
tq bonnie
Are you saying you were a “square” before you were an “us”? Or, if that’s a picture frame–you had no identity before you were an “us”?
Good job–you’re always so entertaining and clever in your work.
in a way you are right gayle haha
uhm you were a box dear? 😛
lol, I think it is funny lol thanks for the laugh 🙂
thanks life haha
A shape poetry with “the ” original human malady…good one.
tq rekha
Simply clever, well done!
tq krisse
wow! Your ideas just sweep me off my feet;P So simple but with so much deep meanings in between.
thanks magher
Another brilliant write…well done.
thanks david
Very powerful message. Thank you so much for sharing with me. xoXox
thanks kay
Very clever and unique. I thought the empty space would have a picture in it.
haha no teri… but thanks for coming by
Very interesting.
thanks liz
Speaks volumes…excellent post.
thanks das..
what an interesting piece… i truly wonder… 😀
i love what you did here, fiveloaf. creativity at its best!
http://pinklady-bing.blogspot.com/2011/04/getting-high-on-sobriety.html
thanks bing..
memememememememe…
loving this….
memememememememe….
awesome…..
a first ~ sweet ~ pour for you to enjoy…
Someone is Special
haha thanks sis..
That was simply ingenious!
thanks ab
A very physical way of putting it! Great!
thanks michele
Fun and fascinating.
thanks danielle
creativity 🙂
thanks anum
Clever with more than one message embedded.
Congrats on April award.
thanks jamie
If “us” makes you unhappy, then you’re right to put “me” first!
thanks truc
A far too realistic representation of the view of the majority of people in western society, well shown Fiveloaf.
The Lonely Recluse.
thanks lonely recluse
I can’t stop staring at it. It’s almost hypnotic. 🙂
well stare longer if you like haha yuuki..
funny and I love the form. Well done.
tq emily
simply awesome
tq belladonna
Hahahahaha. Simple yet ingenius. 🙂
thanks rhyme
quite unusual fpr poetry,… but i definately enjoy it 😀
thanks haggis
pictorial poetry? if yes, i’d say intriguing.
thanks dheep
Took me a while to get through this one, but it was well worth it in the end. 😉 Too funny.
thanks torque..
I’d say symbolic. 🙂
yea you are right -D
Hi! I enjoy your blog! I would love to invite you to join my May Poetry Challenge! Here are some links to get you started:
My Blog: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com
The Rules to the Challenge: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/04/30/welcome-to-the-may-poetry-challenge/
gee i really don’t know my friend… i couldn’t find the time for potluck and the thursday thing- ok i go check it out first..