in the middle where I sat
within the dark surround of
your curvaceous contour
the melody of your life
hums in my ears fashioning
all that is bitter into sweet
.
as I gazed up that sound hole
I saw your slender fingers
motioning in longing fluidity
gesturing on the strings that
connects your inner soul to
my languid passive heart
.
with you I am harnessed by
the tresses of your mastery
hoisting me into your corona
of endless beauty
freeing me from the yoke
that once enslave me
.
with you I found nectar
flowing down from heaven
and the melody of your life
interpreted through your grip
gushes in between the strings
finally filling up the sound hole..
.
.
.
Melody of your life…motioning in longing fluidity…hoisting me into your corona, …nectar flowing down from heaven…
part of the beautiful phrases in this beautiful love poem.
Very well done!
thanks dan..
I love this piece! It’s so beautiful and sensual with great imagery and emotion. Love it, Love it!! Bravo!
tq tekia..
Wow… moving piece… beauty, sensuality, deepening feelings… filled by the love. Fabulous write.
thank you reflections..
Written by someone with strong feelings for their loved one–I love it!
thanks bodhi..
You paint a mighty fine word picture here…*applause*
thank you das..
Oh maaaan.. this is cosmically divine, Kris!!
” fashioning
all that is bitter into sweet” — that really spoke VOLUMES!!
Really loved this one, FL… my personal favorite by you!!
xoxox
thanks kavi..
One lovely phrase tumbling upon another, conjuring pictures, evoking emotion. Well done, Kris …
thanks jamie..
Explicitly exquisite curvaceous contours!
thanks jaan..
the strings that
connects your inner soul to
my languid passive heart …
this totally has my heart … loved it!
🙂 thanks blaga..
Nectar from Heaven, you penned all in a beautiful expression… 🙂 This left me pondering deep with emotions…
ponder more and you will find the gist of it..
This is such a beautiful poem, you really know your stuff 🙂
i am a novice ina- no real stuff here except for writing my thoughts..
A gorgeous threnody, the sort of unbuckled and ripened blossoming which almost hurts to be so sweet, so naked. It’s brave, because the heart in it is so exposed. – Brendan
wow what a coment you gave.. thanks brendan..
Ahh….lovely…fluid and lyrical 🙂
appreciate this eugenicist..
The nectarivore in me finds this very smooth and soothing 🙂
eh? thanks hannah..
That was very moving, indeed!
thanks madeleine..
This is great kris.
Very kind of winding, quite imaginative really
tq rich..
I love the imagery and the passion that came with your words. Well done. Beautiful poem indeed 🙂
tq kat..
Beautiful words… Finding the right person to fill the hole in our heart and life.
haha thanks sam..
wow! that was truely gorgeous! beautiful flow… just perfect 😉
you know mag, if you could shrink yourself and sit inside the guitar like me, you would have understand this poem better haha!
It’s the rhythm of words, the soul, the blues of poetry. Your words do flow here, Fiveloaf.
blues of poetry is interesting comment to me- thanks juicer..
Was it as good for you as it was for me, she asked.
At least somebody got lucky. Right on fiveloaf :-)!
thanks sam!
Passionate and exotic.
thanks laurie..
amazing imagery
yea burrben..
sweet 🙂
sassy…
Be still my beating heart!!!! What a sensuous piece of soul, lovely!
soul poetry at its best?
Oh. yes! Wish there was a like button on the comments!
nvm suzi- we make do.. thanks again suzi..
Strong love poem.. great feeling and well done 😉
thanks tiger..
magnificent imagery.
perfect poetry.
Smiles.
A++
i know you have fun reading my poems ji but really its not so fun writing it haha!
That has a great flow to it, Fiveloaf! She must be a wonderful woman.
thanks jessica..
very romantical! love the flow, imagery and great lines
beautifully written! thank you
welcome hope..
OMG … quite lovely and sensuous piece … well done!
‘quite’ stares out like a sore thumb becca haha! (jokin)
Wow, so beautiful to capture the emotion of love in such a expressive way, shows the true intent and energy created by each other! Good, good stuff!
british are you paulo to use the phrase good stuff ?
Heavenly romanticism and deeply emotional expressions!!
i was sitting inside the guitar writing this nanka!
This is hauntingly beautiful. The words taste so good on the tongue!
you can either classify it as a soul poem, a blues poetry or a show off my skill when i have none honeyhaiku.. 🙂
very moving and sensual poem. nicely done.
this word ‘sensual’ keeps repeating on the comments i received here.. is it really?
very sensuous piece, kris, love this 🙂
yea i know imagina~ someone just described it haha!
Kris,
You do have a wonderful way with words and this is one of your very best!
Best wishes, Eileen
thank you eileen~ coming from you is indeed worth my effort haha!
Great poem, visually beautiful too. There are lines I like very, very much…
whatever you do try not to plagiarise seabell haha! (jokin)
i so deeply love the 2nd paragraph
“as I gazed up that sound hole
I saw your slender fingers
motioning in longing fluidity
gesturing on the strings that
connects your inner soul to
my languid passive heart”
is this an echo or what ? haha (jokin) thanks papo..
Wow. These are beautiful words.
thank you liz..
Beautifully expresses that sweet communion in the gift of another.
thanks joanna..
Wow, I would love to be loved like this, very passionate. Wonderful
eh? ok! thanks shelli..
That is fantastic! Probably one of your best, if not THE best poem of yours I’ve read. Sensual and romantic (in the full sublime sense of the word).
thanks bward42.. 🙂
Nice poem – its got a lovely flow to it
thanks dunstan
I feel the same way about one of my guitars…nicely written!
thanks charlie
Gorgeous piece, fiveloaf.
thanks thingy
It was like reading a song to my heart and spirit.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/03/08/hallowed-feet/
thank you jp
🙂 hope it is! wow!
you are basically awesome.. i will re-read this one
thanks robin
The flow and emotions evoked are utterly delightful!
thanks ab
Wow! I read this as being incredibly sexual. Strong imagery- very nice. Thanks for sharing. 🙂
you do? thanks..
Your writing is so beautiful, Kris. All your emotion is out in the open for us to see. Simply breathtaking.
thanks cheryl..
that was nicely crafted, great sentiments!
thanks life..
It must be that kind of night so far…I am also drawn into your beginning as well, but in a much different way due to the sensuality of your poem…I like this.
thanks reg..
gorgeous 🙂
thanks baishali
wow..beautiful….a love so profound that it taste liek nectar that came down from heaven..exelent write..
thanks chim..
I’m fascinated by the typography of this. Is it of your devising. I think it has a lot going for it, the idea that the look of a poem on the page matters (as much as?) as the sound of it.
pretty observant david and yes, its all of my own devising. to me everything is important.
Very well written!
thanks kevin
Ill be sure to check back!
please do kevin and thanks..
i love your use of music to describe the sensuous connection. beautiful!
thanks dani
I read this poem and it made me want to go to Heaven…good job
heaven is a place on earth ? haha thanks wesley..
Wow 🙂 Beautiful and profound !
thanks ibeingme
I envision this beautiful instrument reverberating the melodic story of a love with no bounds…..two harmoniously joined to share their song with the world….
thanks heartspell..
Seldom is there a man that can write words that cause the soul to drift into dreams of peaceful intimate settings where the rest of the world doesn’t matter such as you Kris …excellent work
you had too much sugar in the morning stuart? cos out from your mouth is alot of flattery sweetness haha!
lovely flow
tq magic eye..
Melodious and soft and so in filled with love–the stuff of fairy tale romance,
languid and sweet,yet passionate ,it made my feelings dance.
thanks butterflies of time..
…with you I found nectar…
Gorgeous…and naughty images abound…’nuff of that ey!
Good read!
naughty images? thanks kolembo..
Spun out in the midst of desire seems a good place to put this poem. The manner with which you built the image of beauty out of subservience and compassion really stayed with me as I thought about the poem after re-reading it a few times. Excellent manner of communicating the love that you feel. Definitely put me in a better mood. Thanks for posting such an empathetic poem. Take it easy,
crb.
thanks duder and wow! what a comment you gave!
Nectar is truth, truth beauty.
tq irene..
I love your stuff and I have nominated you for the versitile blogger award. Youhttp://lunawitch15.wordpress.com/2011/03/11/the-versitile-blogger-award/
I hope you accept!
yea i accept and thanks lunawitch
Mesmerizing.. I don’t want to ruin it with too many words
tq robin
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thanks..
lots of yummy words here.
good stuff!
hey thanks evelyn..
lush and beautiful
thanks rene~ lush seems to be quite erotic..
I can only conclude from you spark flying imagery that you are living in a very ” HOT” climate:)
haha hot? you are cheeky lol..
Simply beautiful! To put it simply! Peace:)
tq terri..
tq delphine for subscribing- if this is your true love, never stop writing.. 🙂
MY GOD…I just feel it. Like it is written for me 🙂
haha written for you? oh if you like you can sit in and allow your imagination to sink.. thx betty!