I watched that dew
streaming off the leaf
onto my fingertip
.
I watched that dew
streaming off my fingertip
into the pond
.
it fascinates me
to watch it drip
as its ripple sparkles the water
.
but I can’t hold it..
.
.
.
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I watched that dew
streaming off the leaf
onto my fingertip
.
I watched that dew
streaming off my fingertip
into the pond
.
it fascinates me
to watch it drip
as its ripple sparkles the water
.
but I can’t hold it..
.
.
.
🙂
Very beautiful. xoxx
tq desiree..
Is it about something that is better to let go?
The dot=the pause between stanzas… those are great in building the mood…
This poem definitely makes me wondering… 🙂
its difficult to tell you how i feel. i can only express it in poems..
something very zen-like in this piece. i like it.
tq siubhan
Your words are so profound. Sometimes all we can do is watch and enjoy even though we cannot have what we see. Great poem!
on the spot deadpoet..
super cool!
perfect style!
tq ji..
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/10/13/the-most-valuable-poet-award-4-rally-week-30/
have a fun day!
sure..
just awesome kris.
you are now my no. 1 fan trish..
Beautiful verses.. Bringing out what could not be held… what needs to go in the flow of life.. I don’t know but I could relate it to something such as perception in love as well as when certain issues close to heart but yet it cannot be hold..
Nice write.. emotional.. 🙂
Thanks for stopping and yeah, am glad that I am remembered.. 🙂
thanks krislin for your comments..
That’s cool
It sort out builds a mood of losing something…which sparkles some other…
tq hema..
I LOVE how this poem makes me feel! it’s simply amazing 🙂
tq sina.. 🙂
Like this poem a lot. Very interesting use of the 3 line style and the constant drip of the one dot between them. Leading to a very calm mental picture as the 3 dots dripping at the end are like the drips being squeezed out from the first three verses. Clever.
– Brian.
thank you brian..
hmmm .. very serene ,, i imagined myself there and i smiled 🙂
thanks lady..
Ah, but you DID hold it, if only for a moment! 😉 This was an excellent captured moment, fiveloaf. I agree that there is something very zen-like about it – perhaps the association with water droplets and ripple effects, etc. 🙂
thanks dragon..
i loved it..letting go is sumtin hard..
http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2011/02/wait-we-waited-for-this-day-to-have.html
huwa- sumtin is cute! first time i see this spelling and its so cool.. thanks chimnese
fiveloaf, I’m subscribed and always attuned with you as we are Kindred Spirits. Your feed back is always treasured.
🙂 kindred spirits is nice..
Beautiful ..very soothing …reminding a lot of things ..
You have a great style of writing…Always have enjoyed your poems..Thank you..
tq rashmi.. everyone writes differently- glad that mine appeal to your taste..
hold it in your mind…
will try..
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Stimulates visualization.
thanks mike..
cannot hold it but you can write about it,
a poem about it is of the best honor to the dew.
cheers.
superb entry.
Happy Rally.
😉
thanks ji..
Beautiful
thanks my friend at the ranch..
So that is where poignancy meets reality! Excellent poem; to say so much in so few words so clearly is an accomplishment in it’s own right. Duder, I’m jealous, that was an amazing exposition of one of lifes ‘small’ events writ large. Best I’ve read so far today.
crb.
thanks my friend- you write well too!
It’s good to let go! Let it fly free.
will tell that dew to fly free like you said aleza..
I love dewdrops to.lovely poem
!
thanks i write 4 u..
Subtle and soothing words!
thanks kevin..
dripping through my life like a hand full of water!
wohoho sherrie.. truly?
yet another beautiful thing, we cant hold & have
yes papo yes!
Fascinating… Makes me feel nostalgic…
and did it mag? wooa..
Yeah, sometimes we just have no control over life.
Nice one, fiveloaf.
tq thingy..
hmmmm I like the rythm, love your background…I dig dark 🙂
thanks life..
great as usual…
as usual is a very scary thing for me to hear sam..
Beautiful poem about observing natural beauty! 🙂
thanks rhyme..
A beautifully ambiguous poem, great imagery fiveloaf.
The Lonely Recluse.
tq recluse.. 🙂
ohhh thats beautiful Kris..simple yet a beautiful imagery created 😀
thanks meg the cheeky blogger haha!
The essence of what makes beauty beauty…release and not clutching. Clutching makes for a cheapened pseudo-possession…no? Whereas beauty may be ephemeral but true.
Thanks for sharing this poem.
thanks notatamelion
So simple, so nice!
tq ina..
A delicate, beautiful thing is the dew–one of the many things that maybe we are to just admire and not try to “have”.
I like this thought, Kris.
thanks gayle..
Lovely piece, I always enjoy your poetry.
-Roxanne
thanks roxanne..
You captured the drop perfectly. Wow.
thank you frayed..
A mesmerizing poem…very nice.
thanks david..
the wonderful divinity of nature… not meant to be held, therefore it simply cannot be.
thanks scott..
Love, love this!
thanks thoughtsnotlost..
no matter how hard I try I can’t hold it, maybe everything is not to be held onto. a nice poem fiveloaf
http://touchindgo.wordpress.com/2011/02/14/winter-trees/
thanks touch..
Very interesting. I like how simple it was yet with so much meaning.
thanks subreal..
The title got me super curious…
And the poem got me all WOW over it… dew… ahh… just like time… slipping / dripping…never lasting…
Loved your verses, FL… You ROCK!! As ever!
thanks kavi.. i am rocking haha! around the clock!
Simple and lovely and true. Well done.
thanks gwenyth..
The great thing about poetry is that every reader interprets it differently, according to his or her own personal experiences. Thanks for sharing; I enjoyed the beauty of this single moment you portrayed so delicately 🙂
thanks linn..
very nice. reading your poem feels like watching drops of water fall. very soothing if we can just let it be and not try to possess.
you got it lola haha!
Powerful imagery and statement..loved it.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/02/17/truth-be-known/
thanks tasi..
So much of what is captivating simply cannot be held, contained.
thanks kim..
Much like a moment, we can’t hold on to things we want to cherish. Sad but true, yet all the more beautiful. Thought provoking poem.
thanks brain of betty..
Sometimes I feel as if I am walking between raindrops. Moving between dimensions, Aware of the everyday world but not of it at the moment. It is a very special time, hauntingly beautiful as your poem tells so well. Hard to describe these moments for others as we each experience them differently. Your poem does it well. Thank you!
BTW, I like when people put their link on their comments to me as it makes it much easier to get to their blog. My computer is very slow and not having to look for their link saves me a lot of waiting time. Hugs, pat
thanks pat..
cool
thanks alford
Wow
Beautiful Imagery
Perfectly tickles my mind’s eye
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful beautiful…
🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
Love the transition the dew takes on it’s journey…nice write.
tq reggie..
Some things can’t be saved…
ya mair..
Love the way you wrote this with the drops falling! Poem is simple, yet, meaningful! Sometimes a few words are all that is needed!
🙂 thanks paulo..
beautifully written 🙂 loved the simple words that expresses it 🙂
thx for dropping by my space
keep blogging
regards
DuDo
thanks dudo..
There are times that life would require us to drop something before we appreciate its beauty.
Nice one.
Cha
http://chaspalette.wordpress.com/2011/01/21/the-bitter-end/
thanks chaspalette..
nice peaceful poem. so still and tranquil.
thanks butterflies of time..
Seems like what we desire yet can’t have 🙂
yes yes!
A lovely reflection to start my day
tq belfast..
Very few words, but absolutely thought provoking. Makes me think that sometimes it is better to just observe beauty and not try to possess it.
you do have a point torque..
I don’t know, but this makes me sad. Its like something you want so desperately that not for anything you can hold on to-yet its so beautiful…
you are the only one who read my mind on this one..
loved every bit of the poem 🙂
so imaginative!! 😀
thanks harshi..
hi 🙂
loved it. yes we can’t hold it. they fall by gravity, then evaporate by nature…then another cycle begins.
tq -D..
Your beautiful piece brought such a picture to mind. I could see and feel you here…..xoxo Thanks for commenting on mine.
thanks sherry..
all i can say is wow. this left me sppechless.
thanks bella.. what a flatter!
Beautiful imagery, thanks for the treat!
you’re welcome ab..
beautiful fiveloaf..
Someone is Special
thanks rachel….
You’ve transformed that drop into a sparkling piece of pure poetry. Congratulations!
http://imaginationscandles.blogspot.com/2011/02/its-you.html
tq imaginations candles..
simple words to describe a simple incident yet it can be used to so many situations one might be going through…. positive or negative .. like falling in love to losing someone..
amazing Fivey… Bravo!!!
Cheers!!!
thanks wiser..
very spiritual and throughtful. it could apply to so many things. its up to the reader.
job well done!
thanks tc..
So much in life we have to enjoy and let go of. Just the way it is.
Well done, Kris!
thanks jamie..
It´s pretty horrible when you can´t hold the things that fascinate you… but in some way, that´s exactly what makes them so special, having to let them go.
tq lu ann..
I like the effective way you reflect transience. Beauty is in the sparkling moments
Thanks for dropping by http://shawnbird.com/2011/02/16/confusing-life-and-love/ I enjoyed having you visit once again! 😉
thanks shawn bird..
Beautiful, really enjoyed it.
thanks nyx..
How very true of beauty. We can witness it and even touch it, but we can’t hold it. Great Job!
thanks marleee-i
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Peaceful, clear and simple. This was lovely. Thank you.
thanks seasweetie
hmmm interesting.
tq brennan
Like most of your works, this is interesting, clever, and very well written. I like your style!
thanks the reason you come..
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great expressions
tq anjum.