when I begged of you
to stop
you ignored my plea
and carried on nailing
you should have
.
the sky cried
when it saw me hung
and drenched
frailly calling on you
not to forsake us
.
but you walked away
from the storm
clinging on tightly to
your cloak of ego
disregarding my plea
.
when I begged of you
to stop
you should have
and so I walked away
the sky cried..
.
fiveloaf 
nicely said.
🙂
Awww…this touched my heart!! Great poem!! Have a wonderful weekend x
tq buttercup!
Ack! painful ..
All this crying makes me awkward and sad…
This damned Ego!! The root cause of all misunderstandings..
A cleverly and well-put poem.. Kudos..
yes- ego control is very important..
ah, i can feel the pain.. great poem..
i nominate you for the lovely blog award ^_^
lovely blog? hey thanks imagina..
touching, sad for both…..if only…
Joanny
yea- life’s like that..
Sky never cried on my plea and in-fact when am happy, I always felt raindrops on me.
Nice one!
thank you purple..
5 awards for you,
Happy Sunday!
thks ji..
So beautifully sad… I loved this…we should heed those tears of the sky. heartspell
🙂 thanks heartspell
awww….so heart touching. If only we could let go of our ego….
yea —
The sky shared that painful encounter.
So nicely penned
hope you join us for One Shot Wednesday
can’t wait!!!!
thank you moondust..
awww.this is really lovely
wow- you are back for good or what? have not heard from you for ages..
give me pictures of stormy rainy nights and lonely drenched figures
thanks unprecedented..
excellent poem.
Painful indeed
tq buddy…
If only people knew to put away ego, life’d be so peaceful.. you’ve brought out the effect of ego so well.. great poem 🙂
thanks ilakya for your comments.. nice of you to come by..
pain exemplified… brilliant!!! it is indeed too painful to be judged unfairly.
thanks bing!
hrmm.. i picture ‘a domestic violence’ scene.
you do? ok.. thanks for coming by willie..
A beautifully sad poem.
tq dustus..
That’s lovely.. Very well written.
thks desiree 🙂
Touching. Nice one like you always do.
Cheers!
thks bro..
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thks hoiden
🙂 great poem btw….we really shud learn to toss out our egos….
you got it correct.. thanks!
I like the repetition of the sky cried, makes it very powerful.
tq jessi..
The repetition of “the sky cried” really carries the poem. Nice one!
-Weasel
glad you like it- thanks weasel..
fiveloaf,
Lovely words, even when there is a sadness present.
Best wishes,
Eileen
thanks eileen..
Moving, touching, wonderful :3
hey thank you gally.. 🙂
Powerful! I love the flow.
hey thanks az..
amazing penned !!
thank you ladynimue..
Touching. Sad. Nicely wrought. Very fine work.
thank you jamie.. 🙂
ah, this sparked a memory for me. So painful.
A really well written poem, fiveloaf. I can see you’ve touched a lot of people with these words….
tq menina..
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tq ji but not this week- i am not feeling well..
thts a lovely piece n flow..me liked it very much 🙂
keep writing!
thanks pravin
amazing. wonderful poem.
thanks a million trish..