I graze at the surface of
your warm melting heart
and it went thump thump thump!
to the middle of my cart
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and so I haste to the middle
of my warm melting cart
to hear it thump thump thump!
as it beats loudly in my heart..
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fiveloaf 
Very nice the sound of love being passed from one heart to another…..blessings…bkm
http://signedbkm.blogspot.com/2010/06/sancturay.html
glad you like it..
How wonderful the sound of love in your ear:) Beautiful oxo
tq buttercup!
This was sweet.
haaha!
Superb write. I respect your ability to always write this good with so little words. Nice!
thanks bro..
Love the sound of it when I say it out loud.
Joanny
thanks for the comment on my blog somehow jingle posted an old post not was not part of this rally
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/2010/06/abandon-love.html
haha you do? thanks!
Lovely rhythm and rhyme…makes the words just slide and fizzle off my tongue 🙂
really? tq…
to think that a sublime play on simple words and phrases becomes such an endearing poem.
this poem put a smile on my face : ) thank you ~
hi samantha? wow! come to think of it, i have not heard from you for ages- tq for dropping by..
yes, i have been on quite a hiatus. unfortunately, i still haven’t fully returned yet, as i am leaving the country tonight for a month.
however, your work is as captivating as always ~ i hope to be around more soon : )
a few words say it all.. (:
good job!
thanks shaguft.. feel free to come by anytime..
my heart is thumping and that’s because your poem is lovely. 🙂
amazing beats…
thank you for the cool job done!
no prob ji..
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nice expression of feelings!
tq.
Cool poem. Like how you repeat the feeling of heart beats. Well done. thanks
thank you buddy..
Sweet little poem — I like the repetition of thump thump thump
thanks morganna
That’s a cute poem, very clever in its simplicity!
thanks you jessica and nice of you to drop by..
nice rhythm!
hey thanks bro!
Thank you for stopping by and introducing me to your poetry.
huh? ok thanks..
It is like the circle of love. cool mental images come to mind. asa
🙂 put smiles on one’s face!
ths poetry is really cute
haha- thanks anum!
yes, this is an amazing poem!!!! such a great read….
hey ishabelle! welcome! long time never heard from you lol..
Amazing!!!
And as I read your poem
in whole or in part
I hear a thump thump thump
Oh…it was just my heart…
Thanks for this lovely read!
oh and you are not the only one.. its a great feeling right? and welcome to my humble blog..
This poem is full of wonderful rhythm, rhyme, sound, and imagery…nicely done. Thanks for sharing… Heartspell
thanks for coming by heartspell..
Hey, i really like this
Thank you for visiting my blog!
I like this poem, the idea of a “melting heart” especially.
tq useless…? and maybe i can introduce you to my other older poems like “tumbling” and “is the colour i see” ?
hey severny, you are such a wonderful supporter!
Came back to say how your poem stuck in my head all day , like when you hear a song on the radio and keep hearing it play in your head all day.
Really awesome.
Joanny
real catchy huh? glad you like it- gee, you’re the one who live and breathe art? wow! we are the same…
My little heart goes thump, thump, thump. I love this simple poem, somehow dramatic. Thank you, fiveloaf. Congrats! and Happy Rally day.
hey tq jamie..
very, very cute. 🙂
haha- it is?
Very nice.
Rhyme on!
Tim Keeton
(Undead)Poet / Wizard / Teller-of-tales
hoho tim- the teller of tales.. thank you for your comments..
glad to see so many people like your poem. 🙂
🙂 its ok.. “^o^” “^o^”
letting you know I am getting your poem to my file so that it appears on Promising Poets Parking Lot…
I will post text only, and with your name, general blog link included.
Thank you for the contribution!
no prob ji but i reserve the copyright hehe..
Clever, clever, clever!
hey thanks kelly!
This is so excellent. I admire the brevity but it leaves me wanting more. This would be great to hear read aloud, I think.
tq leda..
How did I miss this last time? Glad I found it today as I explore you site . . .
A wonderful thing when our hearts melt one another.
Good job.
thanks jamie and feel free to browse around..
Very nice. I guess it is universal, we all hear it. thump thump Thabnks for your comment.
🙂 the thump is similar haha!