just when
my castle of dream
crumbles
you hurried
to my side
to piece up the shatter
.
just when
my world
became uncertain
you remain
ever so close
to prop up my smile
.
you had given me
above all
a new castle to dream..
.
.
.
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just when
my castle of dream
crumbles
you hurried
to my side
to piece up the shatter
.
just when
my world
became uncertain
you remain
ever so close
to prop up my smile
.
you had given me
above all
a new castle to dream..
.
.
.
Made me smile. Probably the best thing that could happen in a life, if one is so lucky.
Especially liked your clipped wording in the first stanza.
thks lawrence
You really touch me with this one. I think being able to be that type of person most wonderful, but even more I’m moved that you recognize it. This is so beautiful!
Peace,
Suzanne
^o^ 🙂
Thank you for the vote for the “celebrate blogger of April on art or short stories award”, fiveloaf. I really appreciate that very much.
Peace to you!
Suzanne
no prob..
short but well written and well structured , well done fiveloaf.
tq wordwand- forever my supporter!
I love this poem – it evokes such strong emotions. Thanks for sharing. I wrote a poem called Broken Dreams recently – a similar idea to yours, but based more on self belief than the love of another.
http://chloerichmond.wordpress.com/
and did you/ wow! shall go over in a minute..