a foggy evening
a pale freezing sky
a swish of rain
a fall down its leaves..
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a melt of you
a finger down your spine
a mango cusp the tree
a drip into the river..
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a tune on its bark
a summer on your lobe
a canopy open
a twinkle of refreshing..
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a tale from the sky
a couple in smiles
a playground of fingers
the waters sparkle..
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i like how you’ve done this almost like a list
thanks buddy..
its truly beautiful.
glad you think so..
it is very calm and beautiful.
tq again trish..
your romantic poems have a very special quality.
thanks again trish haha!
very beautiful this one. it’s like seeing a scenery. very graphic.
appreciate this, thanks moondai!
It’s just so peaceful…..
And, I agree with Moondai, very graphic 🙂
thank you.. come by anytime!
There is a joyful passion in this beautiful poem. It make my heart beat faster. Thank you, fiveloaf.
Peace and playfulness,
Suzanne
glad it works your mental side.. joyful passion? wow!
tale from the sky — it reads especially out loud as a lovers song — with a melodious rhythm or soft cadence to it. With soft touches of hands –they come together, mingling with the warm rain — flowing together like water,
Wow!
Joanny
tq joanny
Sounds like spring. Simple and fresh, easy on the mind
hey thanks keshav and nice of you to drop by..
beautiful work.. its very visual for me.. 🙂
thank you imagina..
it reads like word shower,
keep raining flowers and musics….
lovely piece.
Thanks for linking.
no prob ji..
You paint a lovely picture– I want to BE there!
then come on board with your mandolin mair haha!
“…pale freezing sky…” — I loved that image.
Actually, I loved all the images you wrote here – beautiful!
tq talon- you are a gifted poet yourself..
beautiful piece of romance under the sky
hey thanks bkm..
Often the repetition of the indefinite article ‘a’ doesn’t work for me, but you surely pull it off here. Good job
Warmest salad
Luke
and to you too luke! thank you so much!
very sensual I liked this very much!
hey thanks amanda!
a great poem of imagery which provokes feeling. Like the repetition and how the final line diverges from pattern.
hey buddy- thank you for dropping by..
a breath of fresh air! beautiful form.
wohoho- this is one lady i have not heard for ages and how have you been almond?
This feels like a stream of water gently flowing.
Quite lovely!
And thanks for visiting my blog too 🙂
no prob louise..
Awesome post! =)
-Weasel
thank you weasel..
Beautiful!! A sensuous and romantic one…
The experience is lovely!! Both, the poem, and the real thing 🙂
Thank you for linking this refreshingly delightful with poetry potluck.. it is soooo befitting the theme too!! Thanks! 🙂
i really wish i could write like this. i can only dream. this is so passionate and romantic. lovely masterpiece!
thank you bing..
befitting? real thing? haha kavita- i always enjoy your comments..
loved this friend, beautiful poem 🙂
thanks william..
Great and I can clearly sees and feel the things you have wonderfully described.
🙂
How did you make a foggy, freezing, rainy evening feel so beautiful? Your words are magic…. I love “a melt of you and a twinkle of refreshing”… these lines are gorgeous. 🙂 Heartspell
your comments are magical too heartspell..i guess we needed to picture the destination of the situation or thing as it travels through rather than letting the pen control us.. hope this helps..
“tale from the sky
a couple in smiles
a playground of fingers
the waters sparkle..”
A beautiful, evocative poem. Well done you!
tq penelope..
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tq ji..
amazing poetry fivey! nicely done! i love it!
thanks julian..
awesome poem, very sensual in connotative descriptions
thanks bella my friend..