Sad. Profoundly true, though. I volunteer in the youth detention center and the brokenness of the kids is directly a mirror of the brokenness of their families.
Those words drawn me in completely.. They were exactly what I had been saying since young..
Afflicting, it is yet somewhat it is true for a few (me, for instance)…
Anyway, thanks for writing such a powerful and intense poem… It melted my resentment in some ways at least knowing there is someone out there (like you) who could comprehend it.. 🙂
They say “home is where the heart is”, so if the heart is in a good place of pure feeling, then both heart and home can be mended toward wholeness…. my wish for you. Very transparent words you’ve expressed here… thanks for sharing.
I think life throws us all challenges and curveballs on occasion. It takes work but that can be changed for the better.
My advice friend, look at everything like it is the last time, you will find love and get love back for your curiosity and concern.
short sharp shock, frankly i dont enjoy sad endings may be cause me is too +ve (blood group is b+) 😉 but these few lines say a volume here …. Cheers mate and hope u find a reason to change the ending
fiveloaf 
simple and well said!
Gerardine
thank you gerardine..
I never knew “home”
The word just did not exist
Too broken to fix
Great haiku/Senryu 🙂
hey doubtful, you got yourself another haiku here..
short one, but very powerful!! Well said here!
hey- its been a long time! thank you..
Very powerful, fiveloaf. Sorry I haven’t been around lately. But know I’ve missed you! Well said piece.
tq cheryl.. as long as you are around, you can come by anytime..
You just said my mind and story..:)
I have my hopes yet unfulfilled, just how can I look beyond and fulfill others’?
Love xx
tq olivia..
Wow! sad…so sorry if it’s your case.
Have a great week bro.
Bless!
tq emmanuel..
good that the silence is broken earlier 🙂
thanks bended spoon..
Sad. Profoundly true, though. I volunteer in the youth detention center and the brokenness of the kids is directly a mirror of the brokenness of their families.
thanks cloaked..
Short yet lovely ! thanks for the sharing.
tq ibeingme..
Those words drawn me in completely.. They were exactly what I had been saying since young..
Afflicting, it is yet somewhat it is true for a few (me, for instance)…
Anyway, thanks for writing such a powerful and intense poem… It melted my resentment in some ways at least knowing there is someone out there (like you) who could comprehend it.. 🙂
S.Pike (Krislin)
thanks krislin..
You poem truth here, fiveloaf, but we always hope for healing. Blessings …
thanks jamie..
Oh how I identify. I am blessed I worked through it to see the sun shine in my own home for my children. Thanks for sharing.
QMM
how you cope with your experience will be a good lesson for many queen..
this was touching and beautiful. it can really happen.
thanks trish..
it’s touching…
it’s true, isn’t it, the way people recreate their broken pasts
yip robin..
I want to believe that one experience led not to a repeat, but a change. I often say the purest of writes come from sad situations.
Was your syllable count on purpose 7766. Sorry sometimes I get lost in the syllables lol.
some poems of mine has syllable count done on purpose but not this one no.. but i appreciate your enlightening missy..
short, simple yet poignant… what a haunting piece, fiveloaf. 🙂
http://pinklady-bing.blogspot.com/2011/02/dreaming-of-change.html
thanks pink..
At least come an break.. hanging is not appealing.. ah, well said fiveloaf.. have you looked at my 200th..
going to ramesh.. going to.. whats the title of your 200th?
ouch- this is very sad- I wish for you a happier future
thanks kathe..
some truth is highlighted here,
powerful expressions.
Thanks.
A++
tq jingle..
simple and sad. but history does not have to be destiny if one is insightful enough to recognize destructive patterns and learn new ones.
well said lola.. well said.. 🙂
It’s never too late to find what love is and to mend the broken home … very good fiveloaf!
tq blaga..
And on it goes…unless someone changes the cycle.
yes.. perhaps..
To the point. Like an arrow.
never straighter faye..
Fair warning, an honest poem…sad though.
tq willow..
They say “home is where the heart is”, so if the heart is in a good place of pure feeling, then both heart and home can be mended toward wholeness…. my wish for you. Very transparent words you’ve expressed here… thanks for sharing.
tq heartspell..
Lovely but sad. Excellent emotion in such a short piece.
thanks msstevensson..
You make the most interesting
word choices.
sad sad poem.
I like sad poems…
tq evelyn..
😦 wow!
Happy potluck! 😦
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/02/08/the-winner-stands-alone/
thanks lynn..
simple, poignant and well crafted. a touch sad, too.
thanks rmp..
simple touching well crafted poem…
tq rashmi..
ow wow….this was a great write..and tx for the visiting my page..
thanks..
The way the words are said so simply, makes the poem sadder somehow. Here’s to happier days to come.
tq hannah- i like the h with a heart below- very creative..
wow cool!! 😀 😀
though u turned your haiku to a 4 liner 😛
you trailed me down to the bottom of my pants did you harshi? no wonder those big smiles haha!
pain
ya it hurts..
Such sad sentiments
emmm…
A chilling fact.. very painful.. Great poem, my dear friend 🙂
thanks my friend..
Sad but beautifully crafted poem..
tq rashmi.. and tq for your review comment too!
people with broken heart too do the same !
and do they lady?
We are the outcome of what we experience…so poignantly expressed. A very deep write. Thank you for sharing.
thanks david..
Love this! Great write!
woohoo! 🙂
Hi fiveloaf, thanks for your visit to my blog.
This here is a good but sad poem.
today is different
past is gone for ever now
spread your wings and fly
hope that is a haiku too lol. Good luck!
yea and you did great ina..
Small and beautiful!
still not my smallest- read ‘fig leaf’ or ‘one heart’ or ‘anxiousness’- those are smaller haha!
The past is gone, the future is not yet
I hope then some love you will get.
wow! thanks for the poem,,
Nice poem, small, moving, deep in meaning.
I think life throws us all challenges and curveballs on occasion. It takes work but that can be changed for the better.
My advice friend, look at everything like it is the last time, you will find love and get love back for your curiosity and concern.
Best wishes to you.
thank gwen..
Who ever really knows how to love? Good thing love knows how to overtake us.
Good poem. It provoked a response in me. Thank you for sharing it.
thanks notatamelion..
Concise poem about the heartbreak of a broken family.
Some survive while others don’t.
yes pam..
Ouch. Strong, smart words.
haha 🙂
Lovely and simple, and one that applies to many!
Me being one!
Thanks for sharing 🙂
and were you? ouch!
Thanks for inviting me here and for popping by to comment on my Poetry Potluck offering! I appreciate your visit! http://shawnbird.com/2011/02/07/reclining-angels/
welcome shawnbird..
Resonates with me – much expressed in 4 short lines! Thank you for sharing ~~ becca
no prob becca..
Wow, sad and insightful. Yet, the speaker “might” not do such a thing 🙂
eh?
It’s so very true. A broken home can scar a person for life–so much that they never know what love is.
Well done, Kris!
tq gayle..
Yours is a light poem too in more than one aspect, mainly because your message is so direct.
tq seabell..
So powerfully said with such few words…well done!
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/02/07/towards-it/
thanks jp..
I think no home at all may be better than a broken one. These words ring so true for me. As usual, short and so well said.
yea linda..
Brilliantly penned
tq ab..
The nuance in broken is tangible– nicely done.
tq mair..
simply said
doesn’t qualify as a poem right marousia?
Simple, sad, and the ending punctuation really works! Thanks for stopping by my blog as well. Peace, and see you at the prompts, Amy Barlow Liberatore
thank you amy- what prompts?
Sad. Easy to relate to the sentiment. Well written, Kris.
Thank you …
welcome jamie..
Hello Fiveloaf
This is quite sad.And to the point.Left me feeling rather achey.
Thanks for commenting on my potluck entry 🙂
thanks gomagoti..
Excellent.
tq david..
The last line is quite disarming. It’s achey in a sweet way.
tq irene..
This is such an amazing powerful piece and of so few words this is great!
thanks peaches..
I have high hope for you! Thanks for the post!
haha thanks..
sigh, there are too many broken homes out there. whether we break the homes or the homes break us, its all still a shame…
can’t agree more bella..
short sharp shock, frankly i dont enjoy sad endings may be cause me is too +ve (blood group is b+) 😉 but these few lines say a volume here …. Cheers mate and hope u find a reason to change the ending
b+? you must be heavy on beverage!
Whhheeww!! Succinct and terse, FL!! Very nice!
I like how you brought out the nature v/s nurture hypothesis here…
thanks kavi..
One can learn to love and the other can learn to expect not too much….striking thoughts in few words.
you have a deep insight.. thanks rekha..
How I missed this fiveloaf, I know not! I followed a crumb, left on my site, glad I found it!
Well penned ~ becca
tq becca..