waters off penumbra
we are but elements
on the silken loom
while you weft quietly
under the moonlight
weaving rivers of patterns
back and forth
over and under me
I warped
facing the stars
I dutifully clung on to receive you
our tendrils go different ways
we function differently
but we accentuate in great finesse
with your skill and determination
and my strength
with you above
and me supporting below
the tapestry of our love
finally flourish in brilliant colours
waters off penumbra
we deserve the accolades together
we revolutionise
and we did it
with no thimble..
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“with your skill
and determination
and my strength”
Such a beautiful way to show how working together brings joy
Sensual and vivid poem, thank you for posting!
Gerardine
oops! there are some obvious mistakes which i corrected.. haha! tq for coming by..
I have a small award for you, please collect it from my blog: http://mydomainpvt.wordpress.com/best-blog-award/ and make me very, very happy.
With warmest wishes,
hey thanks!
beautiful piece of poetry.
with mistakes? oh no! haha- but i got it corrected- i apologise..
neat!
Happy Friday!
tq jingle
That is simply stunning. The weft and the warp of a relatinoship and all else you wove here.
Very nice!
hey- tq for the confidence and i know i need to live up to your award proper haha!
Wow how stunning and so heartfelt. I wish sometimes I could write this lovingly, perhaps I should try and melt my heart a little!
hey tq doubtful..
u do beautiful things,
I have had a cold now,
wish your day go by full of sweetness!
a poem filled with wit and emotion!
Happy Saturday!
😉
wishing u a sweet & swift recovery.. tq for your comment!
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Sweet — the perfect poet award for the perfect poem. One of your finest, you are quite good at this tender love penned in a most beautiful way.
Cheers,
Joanny
thks joanny
Wonderful! Congrat =P~~~
thank you rikka
Yes well deserved on the Award there. Nice one
Luke
it was an old award luke haha!
This was lovely! There was such softness in the imagery that just enhanced the whole read.
thank you talon
What a beautiful tapestry you have woven on the silken loom to share with your most fortunate viewers (readers)…this is so serene; so loving and so lovely. Thanks for sharing the beauty of your woven words. 🙂 Heartspell
thank you heartspell..
gentle or tender emotions always shine through your work..
magical poem!
you are flattering me.. 🙂
That touched me very much, so perfect and loving…and I will stay with what I said before…Mr Romance…wonderful words Fiveloaf…thanks for sharing with Potluck xxx
haha mr romance! welcome buttercup!
Beautifully written.
tq liz..
You weave a beautiful tale in this poem almost ode like and the ending is marvelous!
hey thank you amanda..
love it and the last line…beautiful….continue weaving your beauty…bkm
thank you bkm..
You for sure deserve this accolade!! Congratulations, FL…
This really was a lovely poem!! And especially today, this means a lot to me, cuz Amanda and I posted a poem that we both wrote together! So your poem felt very special indeed…
“and we did it
with no thimble..” — that really did it for me! those lines were simply superb!
Thanks for submitting this sweet poem at poetry potluck… your support is totally counted on!
tq kavita and i really appreciate your efforts in binding all the poets..
poems like this show why you deserve the perfect poet award. congratulations fiveloaf!
Medieval Mist
it was an old award bing and not only do i get it haha!
wow!
that was so surreal. it was all moonnshine and breeze and swirling leaves and all the strange emotions we overlook. beautiful, beautiful poem…
hahah thanks reetam and welcome to my blog- feel free to browse anytime..
Beautiful. Well penned!
tq tekia..
Absolutely wonderful metaphor.
Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/09/26/when-i-leave-my-body/
tq teresa..
Beautifully written, this speaks to me ever so gently of the patterns and rhythms of life. I enjoyed this piece immensely!
thank you eaton..
Beautifully written post! =)
-Weasel
tq weasel..
Hope to see you next Monday,
thanks for the lovely comments for our participants..
your poetry is stylish and tasty…
have fun today,
carry pride,
smiles!
yum yum haha- sure will next week! carry pride?