I tiffin
every single bud
that blooms above my head
pink
white
yellow
blossoms of scented promises
engulf my pate
a new me
by you.
.
.
.
I tiffin
every single bud
that blooms above my head
pink
white
yellow
blossoms of scented promises
engulf my pate
a new me
by you.
.
.
.
hi there, william here, over from Jingles, thursday rally, loved your entry, excellent piece, well written 🙂
tq william- you are welcome to view anytime..
nicely done…i really like those last 2 lines…a new me by you…dropping by on the rally!
tq brian- you can pass by anytime..
it like walking into a florist and smelling all the flowers.
fresh
thks buddy…
sometimes we let others write us for a time – gives us a new angle. Nice.
tq jamie
Ha! I have never seen the word, “tiffin,” before…I shall have to employ that one of these days 😀
In light of that, I like how you spread your poem out, as if you’re actually taking it bite by bite. It’s a delicious arrangement, if you ask me (and most seldom do, hehe). Nice work 🙂
/hugs
The “Good” Doctor
haha- tiffin is a stacked carrier.. something like a japanes jubako- thks!
You tiffin… but I do love the rest 🙂 Beautiful poem. Have nice picnic 🙂
tq ina.. 🙂
Isn’t it amazing what love can do? ♥
huhu yea kay!
A new me by you… great line! Great write! Love it!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/two-yearning-heart/
tq charles..
Nice one. Was intriuged by tiffin. I know it as a tapa you would have with your sundowner. Then the penny dropped.
tq tiger..
look at three poets who used to be in the rally, as they claim, which makes it fun.
perfectly composed piece,
Thanks for sharing.
? what? haha lol.. tq morning..
a home run, well done.
tq noiseless
I am not really familiar with the word tiffin.But it sounds lovely!The various color of flowers present a real lovely imagery!!I love it!
tq june.. the word tiffin is explained above..
Another wonderful poem and so well done I am so glad that you shared this
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/
tq sarah..
Absolutely nice…
tq seabell
Interesting post… a new one…
thanks for sharing…
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html
tq shashi..
I lack writing in short …so love the pieces which are written quite short and crispy…:-D
Enjoyed your poetry…
tq pure2core..
A new me by you, I like that
tq kodjo..
Blossoms of scented promises bring out the potential. A new me by you ensues. Concise and well written.
tq dan..
Outstanding, as always. Your peoms never disappoint.
This one is no exception. Write on …!!!
Namaste,
Isadora
hey thanks isadora..
Nice!! I like I like! 🙂 Just the mention of yellow makes me feel yellow! 🙂 Well done!
tq elyas..
you made me, i made you.
tq zongrik
nice colorful imagery here Fiveloaf!
tq tekia..
The changes another person can bring upon oneself… nicely written, in a perspective I would probably would not have thought of .
tq ankoku..
This leaves such a sweet and happy feeling. Your charming self is showing.
haha thanks bodhi.. not much of a charmer lol..
a new me, by you! beautiful…
tq sina..