we painted the hallways
with colors of our own
now it is brightly splashed
still it is but a hallway..
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we painted the hallways
with colors of our own
now it is brightly splashed
still it is but a hallway..
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fiveloaf 
i like the meaning of this… it’s a deep deep one
thanks- you can say alot of objects has meanings in the words i chose..
A variety of expressions lend orchestral colors!! many events from the past take on different colors, and these exciting features will surely lend a particularly interesting quality to your hallway 🙂
Good Wishes!!
thanks nanka..
Beautiful, so simple and layered – pure artistry and I don’t often say that *bows*
its a compliment marousia and thanks!
Very Interesting using hallways and splashes of color as metaphors I may be wrong but it reminds me of no matter where I go or what I wear, I am still just “me” A tree is a tree no matter the season.
Either way —- if that is the meaning or not , it makes one pause and reflect — very well crafted – your poetry always brings me much pleasure to read.
joanny
as long as you enjoyed it, thats all that matters haha! thanks joanny..
crisp n beautiful..
well done .. 🙂
Love xx
thanks olivia..
Cute and enigmatic as always, Fiveloaf.
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/12/20/one-second/
thanks jessica
I’ve said over and over how amazing a short poem can be in conveying meaning, and this just proves my point! Utterly brilliant!
thanks bward..
very wisely said.
thanks trish..
These lines are as intriguing as the name of your blog. I do agree, we sometimes we try to package things our way and dish it out in life but does it change the inherent nature?
Superb!
thank you vibhuti..
So much said with simple imagery. Well done as usual.
~ C
🙂 thanks again cheryl..
Simple like truth
tq ina..
i love the way this is a metaphor about life… we “paint” our lives with our own experiences..maybe intense, but in the end it is life 🙂
thank you robin..
Oh, I like this very much!
🙂 thanks mary..
I have a real admiration for those who can write so effectively in a short, concise way. This is exemplary, thought provoking and rich, and all in twenty words. Amazing.
thank you hedgewitch..
Good write that can be read in a variety of ways. I don’t know what you’d call it, symbolic fusion perhaps(?) but with a kaleidoscope of interpretations this is an amazing short poem. Whatever symbols or emotions the reader brings to the piece can be used in interpreting the main images the poem is built around gives it a good depth that you don’t find all that often in short poems.
crb.
thanks caribbean.. appreciate your comments !
Very nice. I learned to roller skate in our hallway, and after I was finished, it was still a hallway too! ; )
you are cute gigi haha!
just a different layer but beneath it remains the same, very good write fiveloaf….thanks for your visit
thanks and cheers for a wonderful season!
Very vague…so your mind can “paint” the scene…or at least my mind can. This is great!
thanks lucky..
hah! were you peeking into our hallway of many colors? Nicely written!
cute! 🙂
Talk about Zen! I love what you’ve captured in so few words. And still it’s a hallway. ;0)
well put.
the core is the same regardless how many wrinkles one has outside.
A++
hi ji! thanks for your thoughts!
thanks liv! my words in this posting is not like yours. may be simple but there is no calm in it.. so. no zen haha!
From new to old, an interesting poem with few words excellent
thank you kodjo..
isn’t that the truth!
enjoyed this
thank you
thank you for your visit and comment
no prob hope and you did wonderfully well too!
You captured such a beautiful metaphor–which can have many different meanings. I loved it–makes you think! xoxo
thanks bodhi- you see right through it! very sensitive..
Sometimes the best poems are the shortest! I like the layers of meaning hidden in your image.
thanks nolina- and you can sense the layers.. wow! it is fascinating how poets like you intepret my poems..
we do indeed paint the world our own, with this and that but yet we remain ourself beneath all the layers we put forth. thats a brilliant metaphor for so many things. you have left me pondering. i love that! 🙂 Happy Potluck!
thank you kellie..
I love the simplicity of this piece…through the simplicity the complex is not just understood, but experienced…
Nice potluck!
thank you annie.. you brought out my concept of writing simple so that the reader can understand easier..
Really it’s about how we paint. Expression is beautiful.
thank you irene..
I enjoyed this. It gives off a whimsical feel to me, especially with the words “brightly splashed”. That last line suggests that the paint is covering up of something. Job well done friend!
thank you tekia my good friend..
so, so, SO true…
loved this…
thank you tekia..
Maybe still just a hallway, but when you look at it as an entrance the meaning changes…so therefore, I look at it as the entrance to your colorful soul!
haha suzi suzi- as you like it!
Very poignant piece of poetry. It has me visioning children painting willynilly leaving a bright display of color, not damaging a hallway, because that is what it is a hallway.
I loved this.
thanks 🙂 ..
You can paint it up all you wish, you can change how it looks, but never the basic substance lying at the core…the basic fact of what it *is*. Such truth – an image and a symbol that can be applied to people and to life-at-large as well…Nicely done.
thanks chris..
Perception tends to be reality and I perceive this to be quite an enjoyable read. 🙂
thanks dasuntoucha..
Few words, lot said.
People have diverse interests.
thanks madan..
Nicely said fiveloaf.
Happy holidays to you.
Pamela
thanks pam and happy holidays to you too..
hi five! and a high five as well. nicely written…. i like the simple poems that have deeper meaning and you have accomplished. read, and read again…. 🙂
thanks 700miles..
Brilliantly done as always.
as always? you flatter me lol..
Nice! mysterious…
meant to be, meant to be mair and thanks for coming by..
Yes makes you think doesn’t it :O)
not for those who hates to think haha! thanks madeline..
Thanks for taking time to comment on my poem!
I find your compact poem very moving. Such good use of imagery tied in with introspection makes for good poetry. Looking forward to more.
Merry Christmas…………….cj
PS: i hate halls.
haha you hate halls? claustrophobic isnt it? thanks anyway cj..
Ah!
The (excellent) short poems get me every time! In this case I would take the “(excellent)” out of the brackets for sure. 🙂
No matter the size of the space, there’s always room for imagination.
Thanks for sharing!
thank you lyndia..
Very good picture painted with few words.
this is sweet and thanks fay..
…nice lesson in your words.
thanks shewriting..
A hallway can become more than a hallway, if colorful things happen in it, and if it’s full of good (and even bad) memories.
thanks the reason you come..
This is beautiful … a breathtaking example of why poetry wraps life up into a few meaningful words. Thanks for this gem!
thanks imagination..
Love this. Fun. Direct. Ironic. A delight. – bill
thanks bill..
Very deep indeed…
I like this kind of work a lot..
Thanks for writing… 🙂
🙂 thanks sumit..
I object to the “but” in the last line!
If life is about the journey and the hallway is the way from the front door to the back, entry and exit, how we colour our hallway is everything!
Disclaimer: Don’t take too much notice of me, I have no credentilas whatsoever
I just love your poems… I wish you a colourful Christmas too!
haha stafford- i didn’t noticeyou but your bums sure did stick out prominently from the sand lol..
its lovely and means so deep… they are painted new but still they are old…
thank you deepi..
The story of lives painted in that hallway…I enjoyed this one very much, I love short poetry and the challenge of how much can be said in few words. Excellent!
Thank you for visiting my Potluck piece. Merry Christmas to you. 🙂
thanks eaton and a happy new year to you too! wish you a productive year in your poem writing!
Like this too! Brief but deep!
thank you wordywoman..
Your hallway takes on its Christmas Colours.
Well done.
thanks tigerbrite..
very deep!!!.. short and sweet.. yet shows reflection of the past onto the present 🙂
thanks divya..
simple but personal. I like how what it doesn’t say leaves the reader to engage with the piece by creating the background and imagining the untold tale of the hallway!
this is for the parts that doesnt say haha! thanks shamika..
Maybe the hallway is the most important thing to paint. After all, it connects door to door.
Thanks!
you are right cloaked monk..
You can put lipstick on a pig, but it’s still a pig?
haha ya but does pigs have lips.. ? i am not sure! thanks anyway timoteo..
Reality is subjective. When we take off the filter it appears so different. Great poem.
yea- cos that is what we wanted others to see of us.. thanks writingtowardshappy!
So simply written and yet very explained, things sometimes keep on being what they are no matter how much we try to change them.
Thanks for sharing 🙂 You made me think a lot!
thank yo lu ann..
thank you lu ann..
Small but nice.
thanks jagdish.. and welcome to my poetry world!
Indeed it is! lol
thanks luke and happy holidays!
There’s a saying in my country that goes “Mono que se viste de seda, mono se queda.”
A direct translation would be “The monkey who dresses in fine clothes is still a monkey.”
So, if it was intentional or unintentional your poem has a similar meaning. Regardless of what your outer appearance is, you can’t change what you really are.
🙂 haha its a monkey business eh? thanks anyway panda
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