i am experimenting with newer concepts- the shorter it gets, the more challenging it is to convey.. thank you for your kind words- do drop by freely and i appreciate comments- thanks again!
no worries. it’s interesting to see how your poetry is developing 😉
That is interesting! I am now set on trying that…it is true that with shorter poems, it takes great skill to convey deep meaning and insight ordinarily found in longer poetry. Like haiku!
Great poem,
~FAI
Oh, very interesting this.. and life moves on with some times head up and and at others tail.. with total acceptance of each other as none tries to separate from the joint.. trust me..the coin will keep on shining..with happiness..
I like it! Concrete or shape poems are one of my favorite forms to write. Thanks for sharing this with me and for all your comments on mine. Let me know if you do anymore concrete poetry!
You’ve done it – you’ve fit a circular object (coin) into a rectangular shape and you’ve done it with panache… plus there’s a great message succinctly put in few words. A perfect package – love it!
I love poems like these. This reminds me of Nikki Giovanni. I don’t quite think like this making it all the more remarkable when I read it. Excellent. Thank you, Gay
Just amazing!One of my frustrations.To write in a style like this.Always so much in just a few words.Gotta learn this style.It’s truly an amazing way of conveying thoughts.
Thanks for always dropping by on my side,too.I truly appreciate it!
Oh wow.. this is really good!! Opposites attract, alright.. but when they cannot meet, that’s when it get real sad…
So simply stated, fiveloaf.. very nice!
this is brilliant! on one way both belonging to the same coin,on the other facing opposite dimensions, and the only connection would be that fine border…beautifully done!
fiveloaf 
beautifully unique. i’d never have come up with anything like that.
i think i like these new short poems of yours 🙂
i am experimenting with newer concepts- the shorter it gets, the more challenging it is to convey.. thank you for your kind words- do drop by freely and i appreciate comments- thanks again!
no worries. it’s interesting to see how your poetry is developing 😉
That is interesting! I am now set on trying that…it is true that with shorter poems, it takes great skill to convey deep meaning and insight ordinarily found in longer poetry. Like haiku!
Great poem,
~FAI
thanks beverly..
This is quite creative…nicely done.
thanks das.. 🙂
Almost 1 year old. It has the look and feel of a freshly minted jewel!
thank you booguloo
Interesting, agree with the previous comments, very creative, thanks for sharing. Here is my entry http://scentofmyheart.wordpress.com/2010/11/10/libertango/
thank you scent..
Very clever thought processes here – I like it! of course the edge goes around the coin so is never ending, like love.
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/12/06/snow/
🙂 thanks jessicas..
there is such power in brevity! bravo! nicely done!
Happy Potluck!
Kellie
thank you for the compliment kellie!
Beautiful introspective writing, of the difficulty of bringing dreams together as one, yet still being a part of the whole.
exactly what it was meant to be- you are very very sensitive.. thanks reflections..
Well done, fiveloaf. A good contribution to potluck. Poem on…
thank you jamie and to yours also..
short and stunning!
thanks dennis!
appears quite simple yet it’s very deep. Very creative, I might add. enjoyed it.
thanks helena..
Oh, very interesting this.. and life moves on with some times head up and and at others tail.. with total acceptance of each other as none tries to separate from the joint.. trust me..the coin will keep on shining..with happiness..
A very creative take this!
thank you ramesh..
interesting, one could get many meanings from this, we may be together but we will never stand (agree) together…good write
thanks scott!
Valuable poem! 🙂
eh? thanks ina.. appreciate this!
Simple but meaningful on so many layers. Love it!
thanks flying monkey..
I like it! Concrete or shape poems are one of my favorite forms to write. Thanks for sharing this with me and for all your comments on mine. Let me know if you do anymore concrete poetry!
haha concrete poem? gee! this is new to me from all you learned poets out there! thanks shewriting..
Simple but so so deep in meaning..awesome
thanks eugenicist and welcome to my blog! feel free to browse anytime..
Amazing!
thank you so much psalmist..
Wow! What a metaphor to Life.. Unique!
thank you purvi..
You’ve done it – you’ve fit a circular object (coin) into a rectangular shape and you’ve done it with panache… plus there’s a great message succinctly put in few words. A perfect package – love it!
thanks gospelwriter for the flattery! appreciate it!
Fabulous. I love the way you can say something so poignantly with just a few words.
its how we converse all the time suzi. the world’s a better place if words are used sparingly..
What a unique way to describe a relationship and the fact of the difficulties and differences contained within.
thank you cynthia.. and welcome to my blog..
you have such great ideas and your images are vivid.
love love this.
LOVE
we all possess the same brains filling. i think i got creative this time..
this time?
modest too, huh?
def not just this time.
your readers are the ones who are lucky.
so there.
🙂 thanks evelyn..
Brilliant concept summed up in so few words. That’s great poetry, fiveloaf.
thank you liv..
Wow! Very profound though you’ve got there! Great poem!
thanks buddy!
Striking the balance can be tricky sometimes, but very rewarding in the end. Profound bit of wisdom there – poignant description of a relationship.
thank you chris g..
Very unique fiveloaf.
Pamela
thanks pamela..
wow, what a brilliant metaphor.
well put.
Thanks for sharing!
A++
thanks ji.. love your style too!
wow! very interesting and well done
thank you for your visit and comment
thanks hope!
simple n cool:)
thanks hoiden my friend..
ah clever you- cannot flip this coin. I like this! Cheers
🙂
I love poems like these. This reminds me of Nikki Giovanni. I don’t quite think like this making it all the more remarkable when I read it. Excellent. Thank you, Gay
double 🙂 🙂 for you!who is nikki by the way? you made me curious..
What a fascinating poem! I loved it.
Mine are here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/12/05/dreams-visions-and-reveries/ and http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/10/13/dreaming/
thanks teresa..
Just amazing!One of my frustrations.To write in a style like this.Always so much in just a few words.Gotta learn this style.It’s truly an amazing way of conveying thoughts.
Thanks for always dropping by on my side,too.I truly appreciate it!
it only takes one to have an acute observation of life’s creation june.. you can also do it!
Amen to that, I agree completely! Thanks for sharing!
thanks leiffy
I like it. Very true of some relationships.
thank you morganna..
Wow! Now that’s one heck of a presentation and write!
🙂 for you ab..
you are simply amazing, fiveloaf! so much depth in so little words… i wish i can write like you.
thanks for stopping by at my blog. 🙂
oh yes you can bing- you are very versatile.. 🙂
Sweet and short, you said it all ;D
thanks rikka- but out from the mind like yours does is also amazing!
Clever, like the layout too !
thank you tiger..
Sweet. Thank you for sharing.
no prob and thanks for coming by..
Wow! I love that. Short forms are great–you really can say so much with so little, and this one is so unique. Thanks for it.
thank you heather! 🙂
clever and original… love it! thanks for the link 😉
thanks for the compliments magher..
Sheesh! Got enough comments? (I”m so jealous!)
I can see both sides of this, but I’m having difficulty deciding which one I like better. (Maybe I’ll just flip a coin!)
haha you are so funny eric! thanks for flipping the coin!
Wow!…amazing thoughts.
Cheers!
thanks bro- try making a coin stand on its edge and the inspiration might just fall on you haha! cheers! 🙂
really lovely — perfect in it’s simplicity!
🙂
thanks for visiting…
thanks mel.. have a nice day!
How do you always do this !! such simple idea in such a powerful way ! Wow 🙂
many factors ladynimue.. many factors.. disciplining yourself to be simple is one of them.. 😉
How original and thought-provoking. I really like the image this provokes. Wow. 🙂
~ C
thanks cheryl- and thanks for adding me into your blogroll.. i shall too!
very complex!! good one 🙂
thanks tootsie..
It does sometimes feel like a flip of the coin..
haha yea- is that how you interpret it? as long as it means something..
Awesomely cute! 🙂
😉
PRESENTATION 100% I LOVE, very nice!
Thanks for the visit as well 🙂
welcome life and thanks for the comment!
So different, I liked it. Heads I win… ; )
Thanks for visiting my blog.
yes you win haha! welcome!!!
very cool, tricky, fun, thought provoking
thanks sc..
Very thought provoking…and sounds metaphorical..
great piece of write
Regards~ Sayandeep
thanks sayandeep for your compliment!
Wow – that’s striking. Really well done! Thanks for visiting mine, btw. I’m glad I got to rest this.
you’re welcome mary bach and thank you for your comments..
I enjoyed the simplicity of this.
thanks KB..
Oh wow.. this is really good!! Opposites attract, alright.. but when they cannot meet, that’s when it get real sad…
So simply stated, fiveloaf.. very nice!
thanks kavita..
Very enjoyable. The words and the visual that is created. Almost coins in a box. Thanks for stopping by and visiting me and leading me to this.
welcome to my poetry blog cloaked monk and thank you for your comment..
nice.. i like the imagery… “that joins us”
thanks robin and welcome to my poetry blog..
How imaginatively creative, Fiveloaf–and cute!
thanks bodhirose…
This is quite a a metaphor…:-)
tell me what it is… 🙂
🙂 a momentary feeling that wasn’t quite right at that time?
this is brilliant! on one way both belonging to the same coin,on the other facing opposite dimensions, and the only connection would be that fine border…beautifully done!
thanks liliana..
Hi, that is indeed an unique way to write simple poetry…
inspiration can be found in microcosm shail..and thats where my lenses sometimes focuses on 🙂
Such is the balance of life and personalities. Well done!
thanks thoughts not lost..
This is so deep and meaningful, such a bizarre yet fitting analogy for so many relations in life. Excellently put.
thanks mstevensson.. thanks a lot!
Wow you go a long way in such a short space! Creative! Inventive! Nicely done!
thank you amy and welcome to my poetry blog..
Ouu I like this very much! Great write.
-Roxanne
thanks roxanne..
Nicely done…very thought provoking
thank you choo..
Very creative writing. I really enjoyed the simplicity and the complex ideas at the same time.
My potluck: so maybe
thank you talon..
Smart, succinct– v.cool!
thanks mair..
Interesting thought … love its unique style!
thanks fenny.. 🙂 welcome to my poetry blog!
wow…no, let me restate that, HOLY CRAP, that was good. seriously, i had to reread that one a few times…great analogy
here’s my link and latest:
http://belladonna23.wordpress.com/2010/12/11/smoke-signals/
thanks belladonna..
I love how you explained so much with so little words. Ths is a great piece!
thank you laura..
Excellent. Tremendous piece!
JP
thanks jp..
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